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Just One More Time by ~hereticschizoid:iconhereticschizoid:

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Loneliness seeps into my veins
A dull ache creeps into my heart
Longing batters against my soul
Pain fills my broken mind

All I ask is to feel your strong embrace just one more time
to feel your reassuring breath against my neck
to hear your comforting voice whispering in my ear
to see your smile just one more time

Just one more time I want you to pick me up in your arms
I want you to chase away the shadows on my face
Just one more time I want to feel my hands in yours
I want you to care about me just one more time

Is just one more time too much to ask?
just one more time to feel like I matter
All I want is this loneliness to leave me one more time
Just one more time I want you to love me.
©2004-2009 ~hereticschizoid
:iconhereticschizoid:

Author's Comments

kinda self explanatory. I miss having a boyfriend.
*sniffles* *rolls eyes* you'd think I'd be used to it by now.

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:iconcomplex-simplicity:
~Complex-Simplicity Jan 6, 2004, 5:13:15 AM
Time alone is usualy wel spent.
Making your selve stronger for trials to come.

its true you need time for your wounds to mend.
But this cannot be the awnser to the some.

Stand your ground against this feeling.
It will make you made if you let it.

This no time for regrets but a time of healing.
You need to piece your selve together bit by bit.

Have faith in friends around you such as I.
I know I will stand beside you without doubt.

I will be with you if you need my shoulder to cry.
I will be there if you need an ear to shout.

A friend.
:iconhereticschizoid:
~hereticschizoid Jan 6, 2004, 5:17:59 AM
*sniffles* awww
:hug::hug::hug::hug::hug::hug::hug::hug::hug::hug::hug::hug::hug::hug::hug::hug::hug::hug::hug::hug::hug::hug::hug::hug::hug::hug::hug::hug::hug::hug::hug::hug::hug::hug::hug::hug::hug::hug::hug:

you're so sweet *snuggles* a very good friend :nod:
:heart:
:iconnihilistictendencies:
~nihilistictendencies Jan 6, 2004, 8:00:27 AM
this is very emotional.

lovely.

poor you.


*hugs*

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______________________________

Aaron Michael Feren (1987-2006)
:iconflamedraconian:
~flamedraconian Jan 6, 2004, 8:41:09 AM
"Pain fill my broken mind"

I think you meant "fills".

Aside from that, this poem conveys a lot of pain and desire (a deadly combination at times), mixed in with a sort of regret.

Excellent job!

--
Genius is the misbegotten child of Imagination and Insanity. :typerhappy:

Aliases: ~flamedraconian | ~mnemosynestar | ~dragonwingz
:iconhereticschizoid:
~hereticschizoid Jan 6, 2004, 12:56:56 PM
oops evil typos!! thanks for pointing that out :-) and thanks for the compliment =D
:iconiamdied:
~Iamdied Jan 6, 2004, 1:43:09 PM
wow, this is so on par with my current thinking its scary. Great work...really conveys how I have been feelings lately. I love the lines:

"Is just one more time too much to ask?
just one more time to feel like I matter"

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I died for you.
:icondrowningdollieday:
~drowningdollieday Jan 6, 2004, 2:18:42 PM
Lovely. A feeling of a sort of struggling hope. :hug: I like

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sink
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