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Hope for Tomorrow by ~hereticschizoid:iconhereticschizoid:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Old Poetry Structure > Emotional




With every yesterday, aging flowers wilt;
A child dies, an innocent feels guilt.
With every passing day, a lover leaves;
A sister starves, a mother weeps.

With every tomorrow, a flower blooms anew;
A life is created, an argument is through.
With every future day, love is made;
A sister laughs, a friend gives self-less aid.

Yesterday's pain sits heavy on a broken back,
bent heavy with fatigue and endless sorrow.
Today's hardships are added to the stack,
Yet we look forward to Tomorrow.
©2004-2009 ~hereticschizoid
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Author's Comments

I like this poem because it is kind of bittersweet.

You can look at it as either uplifting, or melancholy.

I started this out thinking to make it uplifting, but at the end I realized it can be a bit depressing.

I like that twist I created without even thinking about it. :boogie:

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:iconseveneves:
~seveneves Mar 10, 2004, 5:05:33 AM
damn, i love your stuff. im not much of a reader, but reading these makes me think about stuff. thank you :)

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it's ironic considerate rarity patron of love higher knowledge engulfs me...
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~hereticschizoid Mar 10, 2004, 5:29:52 AM
:aww: very glad you liked it :boogie:
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~xhileno Mar 10, 2004, 9:41:14 AM
depressing? well, i guess the first stanza is, but the rest is uplifting... it's a mixture of both actually.

I love how you treat "yesterday" and "tomorrow" as the present. The ending stanza is focuses on the downside, but the last line, the twist, is uplifting to me. (but it can actually be depressing for some)

There's still hope for tomorrow

or

Tomorrow will never come

:) I pick the first one

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viva chile mieerrrr
:iconluvjoi:
*luvjoi Mar 10, 2004, 10:19:49 AM
so beautifl and thought provoking...wonderful rhythm to it my dear. :hug:

looks like those poetic juices are flowing again :clap:

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wait......did I really just say that? :confused:
:icontwilightkillerreborn:
~TwilightKillerReborn Mar 10, 2004, 1:00:56 PM
Another beautiful poem. Talented!
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~hereticschizoid Mar 10, 2004, 3:27:08 PM
=D glad you found the rhythm of it :-)

Yes, I think I may be getting back into the poetry thing. Thank god. I don't think I liked my digital camera. Thing pisses me off a lot of times. :shakefist:
:iconluvjoi:
*luvjoi Mar 10, 2004, 3:29:10 PM
:lmao:

you've taken some interesting pics with your camera ;-)
so that's kinda cool :nod:

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wait......did I really just say that? :confused:
:iconhereticschizoid:
~hereticschizoid Mar 10, 2004, 3:34:47 PM
lol gee thanks *glares* ;-)
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