Strength seeps through the ground
flowing from his stance, his posture;
Roots that remain unwavering
by his shoulder-width apart.
He defies logic and reason
and defines it in the same breath;
an intimation of his own conclusion,
confident, absolute, concrete
except for the endless possibilities;
Would you be so daring as to fantasize...
Touch, feel the strength teasing your fingertips
such an intense wave of electricity:
Tendrils of excitement tying up your breath,
the sweetest asphyxiation.
Taste, if you would be so bold...
Just a terrifying thought that makes your mouth water.
Would his kiss be gentle, demanding, intoxicating?
See the luster of your passion on your parted lips.
Could you imagine yourself lost,
hidden in the strength of his embrace
restored by his warmth while your body responds
pressed against someone so different, difficult.
Your veins pulse with heat, blood rushing, rushing...
A gorgeous contrast to his mysterious apathy
Calloused contradiction to your tender skin;
You watch demurely, taking it all in...
Confused but clear
You're flustered but you know what you want
Taken, used, desired; if only you could be that fulfilling.
your breath bated for his satisfaction.















Comments
There are a few things you might want to look over again, though. The line "See the luster of your passion on your parted lips." is a pretty complex sentence, and the rest of your lines are pretty simple so it sort of disrupts the flow of your poem. And also "endless possibilities;" is sort of an cliche, so it may make the reader rush through your poem because they think the rest of it will be the same sort of thing, but IT'S NOT. It's a beautifully written piece, and I adore it.
Have you been to an open mic night yet? I remember you talking about wanting to go once upon a time. I think this would be a perfect piece to perform.
And i used to go to an open mic night in my area but i never performed anything. i'm moving off to college soon so i'll probably find a place there.
i'm glad you liked the poem
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Donate 20 grains of rice playing a word game... it's addictive
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Donate 20 grains of rice playing a word game... it's addictive
"Kind words do not cost much. Yet they accomplish much." -Blaise Pascal.
What college are you going to?
And yeah... i'm trying to pass all my classes plus qualify for scholarships. Sucks doesn't it?
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Donate 20 grains of rice playing a word game... it's addictive
"Kind words do not cost much. Yet they accomplish much." -Blaise Pascal.
There are a whole bunch of scholarships that I've been looking at, but I'm probobly not going to get any. There is this one from $10,000 that vegetarians can get if they promote vegan/vegetarianism throughout their school and community. I think I can do that one, but I really don't know.
I'm glad you're getting out!
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