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Beautiful Daydream by ~hereticschizoid:iconhereticschizoid:





You haunt my thoughts, lurking in the shadows of my mind
My daydreams end with lust and longing because of you
Once again the love you used to give me evades my desperate grasp
And still I dream of you:

Running my fingertips down your arm, feeling the different textures of your clothes against my skin
You catch my hands in yours, slowly bringing them to your lips.
I look into your eyes, feeling your strength holding me up
I feel you pull my body close as our lips meet.

I feel the roughness of your hands against my back; the tension melts away
My heart speeds up, stealing my breath; I gasp for air.
I feel your lips caressing the silky skin of my throat.
Hungrily, I kiss you tasting the passion at the tip of your tongue.

I start to run my fingers through your hair and you disappear.
I am left, once again, with the ghost of the love I had before.
Just a beautiful daydream to torture my shattered heart.
Nothing but a daydream anymore.
©2003-2009 ~hereticschizoid
:iconhereticschizoid:

Author's Comments

I submitted something before and said I'd add to it and such...
well...now I have.
and here it is. Hope you like it.

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:iconiamdied:
Wow, you've turned this into a masterpiece. I really really love this, it is so similar to a mode of thinking I was in the other night that its scary. Well done Danielle...love this, you did great. :+fav:

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I died for you.
:icongreyfell:
astounding. great use of details to fuel the passion of this piece. i absolutely love the last stanza. great work!
:icontwilightkillerreborn:
Beautiful, wonderful descriptions. You know what? it reminds me of my two love poems "His Golden Love for Me" and " Rivulets of Tears".
:iconcomplex-simplicity:
Faving this one. Had trouble with Internet.

It touched me. :hug:
:iconhereticschizoid:
:-) glad it moved you and such :hug: :hug: :heart:
:iconhereticschizoid:
yepyep. those are good poems of yours. glad you liked it :-)
:hug:
:iconhereticschizoid:
:-) thanks for the fave :boogie: glad you liked it- I value your opinion a lot :hug:
:iconhereticschizoid:
thank you :-) I liked the last stanza too. It took me a while to get it exactly right, but I think it is better for the time I spent on it. thanks for the compliments :hug:
:iconkaterina423:
oh wow.. i just love this... absolutely creepy, because i wrote something quite similar last night..... you got that feeling across perfectly... i really do absolutely love this... amazing how you made me actually feel those words, this is so powerful, so touching it sends chills up and down my spine... wonderful, simply wonderful.... definitely a fave... thank you for writing this =)
:iconhereticschizoid:
=D thanks! I'm glad people liked this poem, I was kinda worried at first when I had just started it, but now it seems that it touched lots of people. thanks for the comment :-)

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